Close to shore i don't know much about the story but when i started to read it i was thinking it will be something like jaws where three guys go out to hunt a shark and kill it all that stuff.But the story Close to the shore is a whole different game there is no hunting the shark but it does take place on a beach i don't know what beach but it evan has things like shark path maps and other little things about a sharks daily life and how it can migrate to the north from the south and everything like that.So it does tack a place as jaws because a lot of people are at the beach and a shark comes up and cases panic with all the people on the beach but unlike jaws the shark does not attack anyone just macks a panic.
Keep reading- they do go after the shark!
ReplyDeleteI find it very interesting that you thought it would be like jaws but you were quickly surprised.Can you go into detail about what the island is like what do they do on it and why were they there?In your post you have a couple of spelling error you could fix that in no time.But can you elaborate about the details and just explain it more .I don't have many things to comment on because you didn't put much to comment on. So with that said the next time you make one of these post add more to it so commentators like me can give you better feedback.
ReplyDeleteThank you, C.F.
ReplyDeleteI like how you connected Jaws with the Close to Shore. Why is the blog like a straight line? The title of a story should always be capitalized: Close to Shore. You should of added more details about the story. When you keep saying all of that, that is not engaging the reader. The blog seemed short, but it could of been because of how the blog was lined up. At the end of the blog you showed how it connected to Jaws but you added a weird spot.You should of added when you were talk Jaws and that it reminds you of Jaws.
ReplyDeleteExactly, strong transitions are needed to move between ideas.
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